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"Largest ever EU study published on the subject"

Just dumping it here.
Found this source in QG's sanbox: Harvard Study: E-Cigarettes Not 'Gateway' to Smoking. Might be worth tracking down the study and see if it can be used here as it seems to directly contradict claims of concern made in the article with facts.--TMCk (talk) 16:49, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

I think that this is the study that the IB Times article is referring to.Levelledout (talk) 17:04, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

The study might be a primary source. We can use secondary sources for non-medical claims but for medical claims we should use MEDRS complaint sources. QuackGuru (talk) 17:48, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

"Might" be a primary source? Well fortunately it's not a primary source, it's a secondary source as noted by the abstract (the title of the study also somewhat gives it away). It also happens to be published in a very well respected peer-reviewed journal that's part of the BMJ. And it also represents an analysis of what must at the very least be one of the largest surveys ever conducted on e-cigarette usage. Oh and it doesn't make any medical claims either, it's just a usage analysis, not that it matters since it's secondary.Levelledout (talk) 17:55, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

For Misplaced Pages purposes this is a primary source. This is PMID 24935441, it's original research from data-mining survey results. The PubMed entry doesn't list it as a Review, Systematic Review or Meta-analysis. Zad68 18:03, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

Where did the paper note it is a secondary source? The paper indicated "This study assessed the prevalence and determinants of e-cigarette use among persons aged ≥15 years in 27 European Union (EU) member countries during 2012." QuackGuru (talk) 18:03, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

I think they're getting misled by the title, which has the phrase "secondary analysis" in it. Zad68 18:07, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

I'm not sure that I'm getting misled and I'm not sure that it matters. Your assertion that "For Misplaced Pages purposes that this is a primary source" would appear to be unfounded, for instance WP:MEDRS states "A secondary source in medicine summarizes one or more primary or secondary sources". You say "it's original research from data-mining survey results". The survey was original research and the results were a primary source, the further analysis wasn't and is secondary. In any case it doesn't matter because it doesn't make medical claims. And by the way, yes I'm aware it's not a review.Levelledout (talk) 18:24, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

@Zad68: I agree, it is a primary source, but apparently we are using it, "vetted" through the IBTimes as reference 46 - guess that means that mentions of a primary sources in a newspaper is enough for it to reach secondary source levels? Not exactly what i thought our sourcing demands were. I had the distinct impression that we should stick to secondary WP:MEDRS sources for statistics, medical information etc.

So just to clarify: Can we (as QG did with several) just use a newspapers to "vet" the information from a primary studies, to make it secondary? Is the International Business Times and the Huffington Post sufficient sources for statistical information glanced from primary studies? --Kim D. Petersen 22:41, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

For non-medical claims WP:SECONDARY sources are reliable. QuackGuru (talk) 00:14, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

The secondary source is a newsmedia article, that is referring to a primary source WP:MEDRS study. So the question is: Does a newsarticle "vet" a primary medical article to be a secondary one - which can then be used. Because that is what is happening here. Basically the IBTimes article is written based upon pressrelease for primary MEDRS article.--Kim D. Petersen 01:32, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

As long as we don't use the primary source, we can use secondary sources for non-medical claims. What is a secondary source? "A secondary source provides an author's own thinking based on primary sources, generally at least one step removed from an event." See WP:ANALYSIS. QuackGuru (talk) 01:43, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

So what you are saying is that you think that primary WP:MEDRS sources can be "vetted" to secondary by being written about in newsarticles. Remind me why we do not want primary source material? --Kim D. Petersen 02:51, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

We are not using a primary source. QuackGuru (talk) 04:10, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

Except that we are. The material is from a WP:MEDRS primary source, and you think that a writeup by a journalist based upon the pressrelease makes it secondary material. So again: remind me please, why do we not want primary source material? --Kim D. Petersen 08:39, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

What do you think is the definition of a secondary source? QuackGuru (talk) 08:55, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

I do believe that i asked you a question first, but i'll repeat it (in a little more detail): Why do we not want WP:MEDRS primary material? --Kim D. Petersen 09:30, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

I don't think I said that. QuackGuru (talk) 09:31, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

Please reparse. Your sentence makes no sense in the context of this discussion. --Kim D. Petersen 17:21, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

We are not citing primary material. We are citing a secondary source. News articles are secondary sources. QuackGuru (talk) 18:46, 2 May 2015 (UTC)

Why is it that we do not use material from primary WP:MEDRS sources QG? Because this is material from a primary study - not material from a secondary source. This newsarticle is based on a pressrelease about the primary study - that still doesn't make it secondary.... unless of course you think that you can "vet" primary sources through newsarticles. That is why i ask you: Why is it that we do not use primary material on Misplaced Pages? --Kim D. Petersen 02:10, 3 May 2015 (UTC)

@KimDabelsteinPetersen: No, we can't do that. -A1candidate 00:35, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

@A1candidate: Then we, at least, are in agreement. --Kim D. Petersen 01:17, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

Interesting but a primary source / news source. Not sufficient for health claims. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 17:10, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Increased verbosity

This is too much unnecessary detail. QuackGuru (talk) 16:24, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

It would be for the lead but not the body. Also, didn't you yourself introduce this content? I might be mistaken about the latter tho.--TMCk (talk) 17:01, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

"As of 2014, a small number of states in the US allow e-cigarettes to be taxed as tobacco products, and a small number of state and regional governments in the US apply indoor smoking bans to e-cigarettes." The previous wording was simpler. QuackGuru (talk) 17:04, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

The new wording sounds a whole lot better than your original introduction and the similar one that was replaced.--TMCk (talk) 17:12, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

The wording by User:S Marshall was better and simpler for the general reader. Why have two sentences when we can have one concise sentence? QuackGuru (talk) 17:17, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

(Add ping.--TMCk (talk) 17:38, 4 May 2015 (UTC)) It still can be improved but going back isn't it. Also, you started this section stating there is "too much unnecessary detail". Which part is it that you'd like to see removed? Really curious since you added it in the first place.--TMCk (talk) 17:27, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

I didn't say I want to remove anything. I just think the wording by User:S Marshall was better written. QuackGuru (talk) 17:49, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

Maybe you didn't mean to say this but "Increased verbosity" and "too much unnecessary detail" means just that + you didn't say anything about the wording when opening that section. It's a bit confusing, yah know?--TMCk (talk) 18:35, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

What I meant was that the text was ambiguous and it would be better to have one sentence. QuackGuru (talk) 18:36, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

Now that's a 3rd reason. The answer is no, it's not ambiguous at all, not more nor less than the "original". I have now rewritten the sentence in part, hopefully more to your liking.--TMCk (talk) 18:53, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

The previous wording was easier to understand and there is no need for two sentences. QuackGuru (talk) 18:56, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

You're repeating yourself which is not furthering the discussion.--TMCk (talk) 18:59, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

I agree, multiple different reasons given by QG at multiple different times and no clear arguement as to what their issue is with the very minor change that neither added nor removed any significant amount of detail. The sentence was a long one so it was a good idea to split it, we really shouldn't need to discuss such trivial, tedious matters.Levelledout (talk) 21:47, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

It was originally streamlined by S Marshall. Two sentences for the short wording did not improve the text. The second sentence is still not clear because it does not state the date that is as of 2014. I'm not sure why you think it was long when it can be more concise with one sentence. QuackGuru (talk) 21:58, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

I'll add "it does not state the date that is as of 2014" to your list of ever-changing reasons then. When you've finished collating them, do you think you could let us know?Levelledout (talk) 23:19, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

It does state it was the year 2014. Please read the source. QuackGuru (talk) 23:24, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

OMG! QG. Reread Levelledout's comment and try again.--TMCk (talk) 23:36, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

• I think it's important that other users are allowed to edit the article, and although I'm mildly curious about A1Candidate's reasoning for that edit, I'm not anxious to get bogged down in quibbling about it.—S Marshall T/C 09:54, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

• User:S Marshall, according to the initial edit it was unnecessary according to the edit summary. The edit summary for next edit was Grammar + copyedit. This is confusing. Unless there is an explanation on how two sentences is better than one I think we should be back to one. One sentence can be shorter and better written as well for the general reader. QuackGuru (talk) 16:45, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

• The "initial" edit removed added a duplicate citation, thus has nothing to do with the sentence discussed here. The next edit might be confusing to you but so is Levelleout's comment to which you didn't follow up yet. BTW, are you aware that both, 1 or 2 sentence versions have exactly the same # of words (21)?--TMCk (talk) 17:43, 5 May 2015 (UTC)
  Another BTW: The current version is this one.--TMCk (talk) 17:46, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

• The initial edit added a duplicate citation but the edit summary claimed it was unnecessary. QuackGuru (talk) 17:49, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

• You're right, they might have been a bit confused when they did, tho it still didn't change the sentence. Corrected my post above.--TMCk (talk) 17:59, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

• What is the benefit of having two sentences rather than one concise sentence? QuackGuru (talk) 00:51, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

If you've actually read the replies of other editors then you will know or ought to know the answer to that. Stop being disruptive on several fronts, accept that consensus is against you and move on.Levelledout (talk) 02:56, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

For the short text it is easier to read one sentence. It disrupts the flow when it is split into two sentences. The text should WP:BECONCISE. QuackGuru (talk) 03:42, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Fruitless fruits. I might as well just say banana (or is it banano)?--TMCk (talk) 03:56, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

If it does not matter to you then is it okay if it is one sentence rather than two? QuackGuru (talk) 04:33, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Here you go again not understanding a thing that was said. I said "banana" and bananas due matter and I care about them a lot.--TMCk (talk) 05:10, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Proposed wording

There is a discussion at Misplaced Pages talk:WikiProject Medicine#Proposed wording to increase readability.

This proposal is for the text at Electronic cigarette#Legal status.

Current wording: "As of 2014, a small number of states in the US allow e-cigarettes to be taxed as tobacco products. In addition, indoor smoking bans have been extended to include e-cigarettes in some states and by regional governments in the US."

Proposal: "As of 2014, some states in the US permit e-cigarettes to be taxed as tobacco products, and some state and regional governments in the US had extended their indoor smoking bans to include e-cigarettes." This wording is more concise which makes it more readable for the general reader using less words. QuackGuru (talk) 21:00, 10 May 2015 (UTC)

• I can shorten it even more, I think. "In the US, as of 2014 some states tax e-cigarettes as tobacco products. Some state and regional governments have broadened their indoor smoking bans to include e-cigarettes."—S Marshall T/C 07:37, 12 May 2015 (UTC)

• I went ahead and simplified the wording. QuackGuru (talk) 03:14, 13 May 2015 (UTC)

Draft from USPSTF

USPSTF draft still states evidence is insufficient to recommend for tobacco cessation.

Will need to wait until full publication for inclusion of course. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 17:11, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Interesting read. Quite balanced, factual and w/o introducing bias. Little detail and yet very informative about where the research stands so far. Curious how the final draft and publication will look like.--TMCk (talk) 20:57, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Please split

Forgive me for not reading all the back discussions and checking if this has been said. This article is huge and unwieldy and hard to read. Most of the sections that are not separate articles could be. Any consensus for writing 100-200 word summaries of each section and spinning off the surplus material into extra articles? HLHJ (talk) 22:33, 17 May 2015 (UTC)

That really would be too short. Several sections already have their own main articles. If you do (I won't say read, which would be cruel and unusual) dip into earlier discussions, you will find rafts of complaints about too much detail, poor rack o'facts writing, repetition, and so on, as well as seeing that consensus does not come easy here. Johnbod (talk) 23:40, 17 May 2015 (UTC)

We could split of the construction section. The article is at 126,608 bytes. Will give it a try. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 02:30, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

Good edit. QuackGuru (talk) 02:33, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

Like the idea of splitting off construction, it had got unwieldy but what remains in this article needs to be more of a summary than what's currently left. SPACKlick (talk) 02:39, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

Certainly. Feel free to shuffle stuff around. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 02:53, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

There are three paragraphs remaining. There are ways of shortening the text without losing the meaning. QuackGuru (talk) 02:57, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

Absolutely, a less detailed summary of construction so we can have some summary of generations and leave the fine detail for a subpage. Don't have a lot of time to edit wiki atm. SPACKlick (talk) 11:52, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

I'm not sure what you want left or removed. I restored information about the different generations. QuackGuru (talk) 12:59, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

I don't necessarily disagree with splitting the article but I do disagree with under-summarising it. We now provide barely any information about the different types of e-cigarettes, components etc in the main article. Whilst we're on the subject how many readers do you actually think are interested or bothered enough to read through 8 long tedious paragraphs of the Economics of e-cigarettes sub-section? We should be able to cut that down to one or two paragraphs easily.Levelledout (talk) 20:14, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

• I agree that the economics can be trimmed or spun out into a sub-article, but disagree with putting back any of the dull details of construction.—S Marshall T/C 23:31, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

Oh not another sub-article :) I think we have enough of those for a subject like e-cigarettes. Nobody is going to read a sub-article on the economics of e-cigarettes apart from e-cigarette economists and there aren't many of those knocking about. It's better to cut out the tedious nonsense and things inserted into random places, of which there's quite a bit.Levelledout (talk) 00:56, 19 May 2015 (UTC)

Sub articles is what makes Misplaced Pages amazing. One can have a general overview for those who only want a bit of information and than one can have subarticles for e-cig economists.

By the way usually a bot comes to fix the references that were moved. Anyone know one it has not worked? Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 03:28, 19 May 2015 (UTC)

Per WP:SUMMARY, the summary is usually short.

The bot did not work because there were too many edits made after the original edit for the bot to realise the full citations were missing.

• • I disagree that the economics should be spun out into a sub-page. Redundant or overly detailed text can be deleted. QuackGuru (talk) 18:30, 19 May 2015 (UTC)
• The construction section is now too short, and contains the usual mixture of inaccuracy, poor expression and repetition. Johnbod (talk) 19:25, 19 May 2015 (UTC)

Yes could still use improvement. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 05:25, 20 May 2015 (UTC)

• There appears to be some disagreement with expanding the section. Do editors want me to include more information about the construction? QuackGuru (talk) 16:33, 20 May 2015 (UTC)

• Absolutely not. Editors want to have a discussion and reach a consensus. Someone will make the edit when that's been done, and I suggest, QG, that you understand "someone" to mean "someone else". One of the behavioural issues on this page is that we start a discussion and then you unilaterally change the article before agreement is reached.—S Marshall T/C 16:55, 20 May 2015 (UTC)

I made this edit instead. It cleaned up the section and it is still a summary. Thoughts? QuackGuru (talk) 17:01, 20 May 2015 (UTC)

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